WALT write a timed recount about a time
when we did something special with our whanau or family.
Write about:
·
when and where you did something special
·
who was with you
·
what you did (think about the order you did things)
·
how you felt and why you felt this way.
By Jessica Snelleksz
Mum’s Birthday
On 11 of March it
was my mum’s birthday. We went to Lone Star with Mum, Dad, Amelia, Paris, Nana
and we met Aunty Rose and Uncle Bret and cousin Lily. We got to do colouring in
at Lone Star. The pictures were Dora and Thomas and I got both of them and last
time I got Goofy. We ordered. Me and Lily ordered hot dogs. Amelia and Uncle
Bret ordered ribs and what Paris ordered, I can’t remember. My Nana got ribs
and I don’t know what Mum, Dad and Aunty Rose got. I felt happy because I got
to see my aunty and uncle and my cousin and it was my Mum’s birthday and I got
to go out with my family to the best restaurant that there is.
Next
steps
When writing
about yourself and someone else, put yourself last e.g. Lily and I.
Could you add
some powerful describing words to your story to make that clear picture in the
mind of the reader.
Try not to
use too many and’s in a sentence.
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